Auld Lang Syne

Wednesday, April 18, 2012

Day 18, LUNE-atic Day

so here's a bit of a nutty form for you to try: a LUNE

The idea of this form was to reply to the haiku, so often misinterpreted and miswritten by Americans. The lune is also three lines, but with some different components.

1. No need for the connection to nature that is characteristic of the haiku
2. Lines are of specific length, either by # of syllables or # of words.
3. You may use 3-5-3 OR 5-3-5 when composing your LUNE. You may write a string of related LUNES to gain ground and create a longer poem.
4. Do NOT use articles (a, an, the)
5. Use any 11 words except for the following words: nice, pretty, good, bad, very, ugly

Here is my example of an extended LUNE (notice the linkages between individual LUNES that create a gestalt. Notice what happens in the final LUNE stanza.) This is a word lune 3-5-3.


Wind blows hard.
Witch moon's face rises up.
Light flies everywhere.

Light flies everywhere,
sees whatever we are doing.
No sick shadows!

No sick shadows.
Whistle, cry out at will.
Break your fast.

Break your fast:
figs, honey, hot cross buns,
sweet olive branch.

Sweet olive branch
climb hills, swim across rivers,
braid your hair.

Braid your hair.
Witch moon's face rises up.
Whistle. Cry. Out.


  1. Dolls

    Dolls on floor,
    naked torsos beg for clothes.
    Mistress says no.

    Mistress says no
    naked Barbies. Only naked babies,
    innocent and sweet.

    Innocent and sweet,
    she fights on Barbie's attire
    "I did it!"

    "I did it,
    Grammy!" echoes in my ears.
    Grandgirl growing up.

    Grandgirl growing up,
    while I am growing down.
    Savor each day.

  2. nice job here.... isn't this form a great little inspiration?